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Every Last Moment Counts 1 by ~fokkusu1991:iconfokkusu1991:



Viktor was deep in thought until a strange choking sound to his left distracted him.
A soft splat echoed in the otherwise silent hospital room, followed by a pungent odour that permeated the air.
What is that God-awful smell? Viktor thought to himself as he lay on his bed next to the window. It was a very familiar smell, acidic and acrid to the nose. He soon realized it smelled exactly like vomit.
"Glkkkk..." There was a faint moan from someone in the bed beside his. There was a thin curtain hanging between the beds, but that still couldn't mask the person's obvious misery and suffering. Viktor hadn't realized that there was anyone in the other bed, or that there was even another bed in the first place. He vaguely wondered if whoever it was had heard him talking incessantly to himself at night.
"Who's there?" he called out nervously. This had better not be a trick... everyone knows I'm blind and pretty much helpless, after all...
"I dun feel good..." moaned a tiny, faint voice. It was that of a little girl.
Viktor wasn't sure how to respond. Should he call for a nurse? Try to comfort her? Say nothing?
"So what's wrong with ya, mister?" she asked, attempting to make small talk.
"A man hurt me," he replied simply.
"He must be a really bad man..."
"No... he's the good one... I'm the bad man..."
"So are you gonna live? You are, right?"
He was surprised that a little girl would ask he, a total stranger, if he was going to live. "Yes," he replied. "Not that you could really call this living, though," Viktor added bitterly.
"You're lucky, mister... at least ya got ta be a kid and later do grown-up stuff..."
Viktor was puzzled by this comment. Didn't everyone get a childhood?
"I'm gonna go back to sleep... I'm really tired..." said the girl.
"Can I talk to you a little bit later?" Viktor asked, eager for something to do besides mulling over his turbulent past.
"Maybe, but I dun think I'll be around... I'm gonna die soon 'cause the doctors can't fix me... See, I been in here a long time 'cause I been sick so long..."
Viktor then realized that even the terrible fate Ashley had condemned him to was not as horrid compared to that of the little girl.
©2007-2009 ~fokkusu1991
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Author's Comments

I was bored and mulling over what the worst possible fate on Earth would be. At first I thought of what happened to Viktor, but then I actually thought of something worse.

Viktor (c) Queen-DeDeDe

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D= OH GOD... your right this is pretty sad. Poor girl.
I read this over and over and over again. its that good.

*may doodle up some story boards for this >_>*

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oh..yeah and now my mind keeps saying that shes gonna live a little while, Viktors gonna get all attached to her because shes someone to talk to and well what with her being a child she doesn't judge him for who he is, they become friends so to speak, and then she dies, =(

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Life is like The lottery. Some people never hit the numbers, and grow bitter. Some people hit some of the numbers, and become a slave to the system. And people that hit all the numbers are better off, but every hates em afterwards. - Rurik
:iconfokkusu1991:
Yeah, that's pretty much it. One day he doesn't hear from her anymore, asks the nurse what happened to her, and gets told she died. :(

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:iconfokkusu1991:
Ooo, a story board would be cool. :)

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be love if you wrote more of this as well :3

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Life is like The lottery. Some people never hit the numbers, and grow bitter. Some people hit some of the numbers, and become a slave to the system. And people that hit all the numbers are better off, but every hates em afterwards. - Rurik
:iconfokkusu1991:
Yesh, I will do that! :)

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Aw thats sad!!! Touching in a way... Its good.

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You'd think killing people would make them like you... but it doesn't. It just makes them dead.
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So sad..it really makes a person think about life and how it can fade away..It's a great story.

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Thanks, I think about that sort of thing a lot. For some reason. :shrug:

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